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Title: Clumsy
Rating: PG
Words: 284
i've been reading and viewing a lot of stream of consciousness lately.  this is not true s-o-c but it's certainly been influenced by it.

he's in his trailer and i can hear him banging around, opening cupboard doors and cursing like a sailor when he knocks his head

i want to go in and pull him close, kiss his head and make him feel better - MUCH better - but i can't because we're friends and friends don't kiss each other's boo boos better

he's clumsy like a child and it hits me in the heart sometimes, watching him careen his way through life, through the set

it makes our fight scenes difficult, the way he's just as likely to clip me as miss me, and when he falls he doesn't just fall, he sprawls as though his shoelaces are invisibly tied together

but the fights also let me get my hands on him, not the way i want but close enough

if i touch him too much it's only because he draws me in, magnetic

his whole trailer shakes and i figure he's dancing again, his crazy dance that he won't do when he thinks anyone is watching, but i've caught him before

i wait for the right moment and burst into the trailer and laugh my ass off at his outrage

what if i were masturbating, huh, Z?  what if i were spanking off and you just shove your way in and -

get suprise-jizzed on?

you're kinda gross

you started it.  you jack off in here?  so professional

it's MY goddamn trailer, i'll jerk in it if i want

i want to tell him to come jerk off in mine, if he likes, but it's too over a line

i content myself with memories of his butt, beautiful globe, shaking around to some tacky pop song

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lexalbum
Jan. 26th, 2011 06:32 pm (UTC)
he's clumsy like a child and it hits me in the heart sometimes, watching him careen his way through life, through the set

it makes our fight scenes difficult, the way he's just as likely to clip me as miss me, and when he falls he doesn't just fall, he sprawls as though his shoelaces are invisibly tied together


Chris does seem like a clumsy kind of guy, doesn't he? *sigh*

I really like that little passage; it has a good rhythm, and good descriptors. This whole little story is pretty interesting, in fact. I like your style.

That said, would it kill you to try some punctuation? :D
spocket_rocket
Jan. 28th, 2011 02:16 am (UTC)
thanks - i appreciate the comment. i'm not sure how well it turned out, but it's fun to play around with different styles.

and yes. yes, it would kill me. kill me dead.
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